HW 28- Comments

For Arden-

Arden I really could feel myself visiting your grandmother from the car ride seeing her to saying bye. I like how you elaborated on what was said before visiting your grandmother and why she actually visiting her. It relates to the common social practices around dealing with death and illness. Assistant having to be with your grandmother for comfort in a place that she doesn’t want to be. This reminds me of my grandmother because she also dreaded the fact of being in a nursing home but providing her with nursing aid made situation better or more comforting. People shy away from the cruel reality of hospitals and death and things of that sort to make the situation less painful. But why blame them.

For Johny-

I liked the fact that you instantly made a connection to our group book Tuesdays with Morrie because it was a significant one. Your approach that possessed pity is a common social practice of many and you pointed this out in a good way. It seems all of us follow these social practices because it’s the best thing to do to make that other person feel highly of themselves. To make them feel stress free because they already have a mental load that is incomparable to those around them.

I feel you started with a great structure to your post but than the elaboration of the moment took a downward toll on it. Summing up your ideas and thoughts is something that every blog should end with (with its own paragraph). I think so at least. Solid post, good job

From Nelson( Friend in college)-
Your writing is very well organized and it stays on point. It also focuses on the main idea of your whole blog and doesn't seem to lose track or wander off the topic of your writing. Some useful tips you can take into your writing can be to also put some of the ideas in the conversation that you brought up to her attention as you did with her ideas. Try not to use so many comma's because those are punctuation marks that separate different items or quantities. The beauty of your writing is wonderful it kept me entertained and kept me inclined into what she was talking about and how she was comparing the new age to when she was growing up. I also liked that you had suspected the lady to be rude and annoying because of the fact she was old but she turned out to be a wonderful lady and that caught my attention and caused me to read more. Your writing is good all i can say is keep up the good work.

Chris(9th grader)-Coming soon